Here is the first clause, the "Come with me or go home" clause. More to come later. It takes forever to write this stuff. Shakespeare is a wizard.
To sink or swim? To cross or shrink? To Him
Whose hands of dust and self created life,
Invisible may be, yet with us still,
To Him declare retreat, in coward's prayer.
I shall not hear't; shan't the knowledge bear,
Nor glimpse of caitiff see, nor tim'rous hear;
The death before the bout, preludious knell!
To sit ashore in shame; defeat across
Innoble brow forever stamp'd. 'Tis not
my cup to drink, if thine speak now. To run
And live? Impossible, if still be life.
Return to wife or child, to craft or trade
with yearning to forget the fruitless day;
The day thou might'st have made the cross.
So be we valiant? Be we errant fools
By trusting God who formed us of this soil?
'Tis better still to die on yonder isle
Than doubting live, unknowing 'twixt the two.
Austen! I love this! You are so good!
ReplyDeleteI like the intro a lot. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteI'm impressed. Did you write this??? <3
ReplyDeleteWow great job! Iambic pentameter is hard.
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic! I love it. Besides what we said in class, I really liked your alliteration. The rhyming is also believable. Well done.
ReplyDeleteReright the hole thing. Your terible at this stuff
ReplyDeleteThe beginning and end are fantastic!
ReplyDelete"defeat across inable brow ... unknowing twixt the two." is absolutely brilliant. The beginning was good but I feel like you really got the hang of it the second half. Plus the alliterations help it out a lot.
ReplyDeleteI see the "come" part, but wonder if the "come with ME" part can be strengthened in your future sections. If what you have said in prior posts is true, the leader has to make it clear that he is in and leading the charge.
ReplyDeleteThis is pretty good. I can't wait to see your final stuff!
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